Should you ever find yourself
In the most fortunate position
Of riding in a glass elevator
Please take a brief moment
To attempt this experiment:
Take the elevator up to the top
Push the button for the bottom floor
Place your head against the glass
Focus on the scene below
The ground rushing up to meet you
Hold your breath
Or inhale slow and deep
Consider the descent
The rising feeling
In the pit
Of your gut,
The effortlessness
Of the fall
The smoothness
Of it all,
Now:
Try to stop
That elevator
From its fall,
Using nothing
But the power
Of your mind.
It won’t work
Give it a shot
Nevertheless
Now try again,
But this time
Close your eyes…
Love it. Such a powerful visual image. First few lines reminded me of Roald Dahl’s Charlie and the Chocolate Factory. Then as I read through, I could imagine being in the elevators of the CN Tower in Toronto with the glass floor.
-C.
Yes. That is exactly what i thought about the first few lines as I do agree; for there is an abundant amount of imagery used here at its best.
🙂
Your perspective always provides me with insight! thank you for sharing your work
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Hey, thanks so much for reading and taking time to comment. I appreciate it.
Congratulations making freshly pressed not easy.
Thank you very much and thanks for coming over to read this poem.
I am going to try this tomorrow morning. I am currently abiding on the 40th floor of a hotel, so this would be a lovely experiment. I like the poem and the image that it conjures. Thank you for sharing.
And thank you very much for taking time to read and comment. Let us know how the experiment pans out!
Well, well, I tried it this morning as I was descending to use the gym, it started out as fun, until my eyes started rolling in its sockets and I felt some surge of a rush 🙂 will do so again on a day that I feel like having a cheap lightheaded experience.
wow so inspirational. I love it
🙂 thanks for stopping by to say so!
Without being in an elevator I can already imagine this, your writing is marvellous
Thank for the compliment. Very much appreciated.
This is lovely!
So glad you dig. Very much enjoy your work.
Ditto! Xxx
You create an excellent imagined experience with your words.
Thanks for reading!
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Its really nice and while reading this poem i could imagine myself in that little room of transport….
Glad it worked for you.
Beautiful poem!
Thank you so much. 😀
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Love it only a skillful writer and poet can have the power to create such kind of visualization in the mind of readers through the smoothly flowing words..
Thanks for the kind words.
I absolutely love the way in which this is written! A reminder that experiences are perceived, and not felt.
Right on! Thanks.
Pretty amazing poem
Thanks a million!
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Nice poem, good message..
Thanks for the good sharing:) i like it!
Thank you much.
Awesome work
Appreciate it.
Beautiful poem
Appreciate the comment and your time.
Just wow. Simple and powerful! ❤
Thanks for being so kind and spending some time on my little corner of the Internet.
I’m
I’m glad I did 😊
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I absolutely love this poem! So beautiful and imaginative.
Killer, thanks. Feel free to dig around the site. Thanks for dropping by.
Incredible poem… Sounds like a science experiment, but I guess a science experiment is a poem too… Everything is a Poem in fact… Nice
You got it. Everything is a poem, including you and I.
Such a cool poem 😀
Thank you so much!
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He’s yes here
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For sure. Will look over next week.
Great poem:)
Thanks.
This is Good Stuff!
All right! I like good stuff.
This is great! The image it creates is so powerful!
Glad you enjoyed reading it. Thanks for your time.
I’m new to blogging and just wondered if you could comment feedback and look at my posts? I would be very greatful
For sure. Would be my pleasure.
I myself wouldnt have though of such…its marvelous
Thanks a bunch.
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Really well done…really.
Thanks a lot for the comment and for reading.
I loved this! It was so delicately written. It sort of layered the experience for me, and I really liked that. Good stuff! 🙂
Suh-weet. Glad it made an impression. Thanks for dropping by.
The imagery is great. My Mind was there the whole time. Thanks
And thank you for reading!
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felt like i took the elevator nice perspective
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WORTH A REPOST, I THINK!
Much appreciated !
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THIS WOULD BE A RUSH…! 😀
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I love this!
I love that you love this!
this is beautiful and touchy
I appreciate your comment. Many thanks.
ncredible poem… Sounds like a science experiment, but I guess a science experiment is a poem too… Everything is a Poem in fact… Nice
True dat
Wow,beautiful.. I would certainly try this once…
Wow,wow..certainly would like to try this once..
You can!
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Should try this once
This is so lovely and interesting to read. The image just creates itself in the mind before you even try it😊
Awesome! Glad you enjoyed.
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A brilliant metaphor for inevitability, and how closing one’s eyes to it changes nothing.
At least, as I haven’t tried it yet, that’s what I get from it. 🙂
I wonder, what will I discover when I do try it? Hmmmm….
Please report back your results! (and thank you for stopping by and taking time to comment.)
Will do!
Oh, and thank you for the follow! : )
Your blog is good, man. No brainer.
: )
Just have had time for a glance at yours. But lovin’ so far. Looking forward to more.
Great imagery!
Thanks so much. I just checked out your blog. Great stuff!
Thank you so much!
I really liked what you had to say
Life is perception; perception gives life.
Indeed!
Hi I’m new to WordPress, but I’ve just been going through your work. Love your perspective. Keep up the good work. I’m a spoken word artist/musician please have a look at my Blog and listen to some of my work (still a work in progress. https://insidethewritingroom.wordpress.com/
It will be my pleasure to check out your site/art. Thanks for stopping by and dropping a comment.
loved it! Its amazing!!
I wish I could write stuff like this too.
Thank you and you can write stuff like this. Practice practice practice!
yess!!..
I will!!..
thank you.
beautiful
Thank you very much.
you are welcome 🙂
Wow, such a beautiful one! I loved it 🙂
Thanks for stopping by and letting me know!
Wow! This is an incredibly vivid image and I had to ponder for a few minutes to begin to understand the meaning, which I find great truth in.
Fantastic to hear! Thanks.
That is such a image that can get into your mind.i love it.and make more story’s
Thanks and will do! 😊
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I think that this is a amazing image that comes to your mind.just think of it while your reading it
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nicely written!
Why thank you very much!
Love <3
Cheers and thanks.
I love this poem
Hey, thanks so much for taking time to let me know your thoughts.
I love your title. You have a creative way to erite
I love your title. You have a very creative and cool writing style. I love how you wrote about the glass and elevator. It gave me plenty to reflect on. Please let me know what you think of my blog. Stay strong and thank you for a good read!😊
Thanks very much. Will check out your blog soon.
need your comments on this one
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Sure. Will check it out and get back at you.
Thank you
I love a great poem and I love to share!
Share away! Thanks for reading and the comment. Enjoy your day.
Sure will. I just started my page today and found your poem. Got one on my page also. I will be finding some interesting stuff to share. Stay tooned!
That’s the best way to go about it. Good luck.
Thanks! Oh… And Love those Bunny Ears!
So beautiful! Thanks for this!
And thank you for reading and typing a comment and hitting the enter button and leaving a comment and thanks and thanks and thanks!
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Beautiful; thank you for sharing
Thanks for stopping by!
Hello. See my blog too if you like art or drawing. Or anyone can see this,, i hope you can., thanks
Sure, though there doesn’t appear to be anything on your blog.
I hope you can see in kudolim.wordpress.com.. thanks before
Ah, your gravatar points to https://helenlim25.wordpress.com
Yeah.. yesterday i make to mistake about this blog.. hehehehe
Beautiful! Love the imagery and how it made me feel like I was there. I’m new here and I don’t really understand how everything works on here. I also write poetry and would like to follow people but don’t know how. Also I have no idea how people will ever find my page.
Thanks so much for your time and comment. Glad you enjoyed the piece. You can generally follow other WP blogs pretty easily using the WordPress reader. You keep writing good stuff and people will find your page. I recommend this to all new bloggers: https://dailypost.wordpress.com/courses/blogging-101-zero-to-hero/
Feel free to follow my dumb blog. Hopefully I can keep you entertained a bit.
Thank you!! I’m following you! Looking forward to reading more of your work.
You figured that shit out nice and easy. You’re well on your way! 🙂 Write hard.
very cool 🙂
Thanks a bunch! Much appreciated.
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No, never have. Thanks for sharing.
U r welcome
Beautiful
Thank you for reading.
Ding.. the mind can visualise to control the elevator door too. 🙂
All sorts of wild things that mind can do!
Beautiful poem… the use of imagery is just incredible…
I appreciate you coming here and reading and commenting. Thanks much.
The feel of your poem is so smooth and cool! Vivid and commonplace imagery. Just started blogging simple write-ups, but I love poems most, like yours.
Thanks so very much for stopping by. Please come back whenever you can.
This is awesome hey. I love it !
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Will do. Thanks for the compliment.