Read it several times and I keep coming back to “Forgetting the drowned” — the title and the rest of the lines are playful except for it. It’s a good ending.
I love the modern metaphysical take on the brief and on the subject itself, and for me, trickles turn into nothing when they finally reach the very bottom, which is the perfect metaphor.
What makes this haiku perfect is that when I read it, I can actually see the three layers of water trickling down (first line as the drops of water on the surface, second line as a sheet of paper where its trickling through, and the third where there’s a whole glass of water already filled nearly to the brim). Awesome job.
Jason Preu 
very smart observation here! I like the onomatopoeia sounds and mental link from trickle to economy. It’s a great jungle gym of monkey bars.
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appreciate you stopping by. cheers.
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‘osmosis economy’ what an unusual phrase 🙂
https://cupandchaucer.wordpress.com/2015/02/16/writing201-water-haiku-simile/
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Thanks for dropping by and commenting.
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Excellent!! Thank you! 🙂
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Oh, geez, thank you for spending your time here.
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Wow, very creative!
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I appreciate the kind words and your time. Thanks.
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You’re very welcome, I like your work.
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brilliant! political and poetic!
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Poletics!
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Reblogged this on dead cat comes back and commented:
a fucking haiku,
news don’t play on the telly,
but everyone knows.
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Everyone does know
From crown to perineum
The center never bold
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And thanks x 1,000,000 for taking time to read.
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Read it several times and I keep coming back to “Forgetting the drowned” — the title and the rest of the lines are playful except for it. It’s a good ending.
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I love the modern metaphysical take on the brief and on the subject itself, and for me, trickles turn into nothing when they finally reach the very bottom, which is the perfect metaphor.
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What makes this haiku perfect is that when I read it, I can actually see the three layers of water trickling down (first line as the drops of water on the surface, second line as a sheet of paper where its trickling through, and the third where there’s a whole glass of water already filled nearly to the brim). Awesome job.
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Thanks very much for stepping into my weird corner of the internet and doubly thanks for spending time reading and commenting.
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